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between ~~~ the~~~ words
among ~~~the~~~ stars
within~~~ the~~~ tiny~~~ movements
aching ~~~in~~~ my~~~ heart
it ~~~is~~~ this
in ~~~almost ~~~silence
that ~~~holds ~~~together~~~ shells,
spheres~~~ of ~~~iridescence
and~~~ incandescent~~~ rays,
that ~~~somehow
cracks~~~ me~~~ open
the ~~~silent~~~ sound~~~ of~~~ which
echoes~~~ as~~~ the~~~ murmur
Between~~~ the~~~ words ~~~to ~~~sit.
March 14, 2010 at 1:42 pm
Thought provoking verse here for me. In between the words can be the silence we listen to.
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March 14, 2010 at 1:47 pm
Their is power and strength in those spaces like air itself.
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March 14, 2010 at 3:09 pm
ohmy julia this poem is simply
gorgeous! a piano playing one
note at a time…adore the form.
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March 14, 2010 at 4:36 pm
Nicely done – and I like the spaces.
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March 14, 2010 at 5:26 pm
Enjoyed this considerably and the form works – thank you for sharing…
…rob
Image & Verse
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March 14, 2010 at 6:57 pm
Thank you everyone! I wanted the spaces very much but blogger didn't want to let me! Glad I persevered 🙂
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March 14, 2010 at 11:10 pm
I really loved the way you used spacing in this poem–reminiscent of ee cummings.
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March 15, 2010 at 12:56 am
Great illustration of concentration.
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March 15, 2010 at 1:49 pm
as a photographer, I learned that when you shoot a subject you shoot the space around it too. and sometimes the space around/between is more evocative than the subject itself.
very much like this verse.
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March 15, 2010 at 11:49 pm
The space between the words are the most important thing…you expressed this beautifully, and I liked the literal spaces between your words, too. It definitely added to the impact.
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March 16, 2010 at 6:59 am
Quite lovely! 🙂
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March 17, 2010 at 6:37 pm
In the space between thoughts – this is wonderfully written!
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March 21, 2010 at 12:01 am
There is breath in the spaces. Well done.
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